[Poem] Depression...

[SalemFuchs]

Depression...
©09/May/2004 By: Salem Fuchs

Depression...
They care not of my presence...
Alas, my very essence is...
...Obsolete...
I am...
Forever...
Alone...
Thus, my soul...
Is...
Gone now...
Black heart...
Is all there is to me...
All you know...
From me...
Is hate...
For love...
Hast forsaken me...
...Forevermore...
I care not...
...Anymore...
It hast...
Taken it's toll...
On my life...
I am sick...
There is no cure...
For what I have...
I care not...
Just as them...
And I have yet to become...
One of them...
For thee hast cast me out...
...Of society...
As I grow stronger...
I learn...
There is no love...
In the end...
You die alone...
Life is all but...
...Easy...
For I desire that one thing which I cannot have...
Love.

[moot]

this is rather good, but the constant breaks really don't connect with me at all. might be just me, or it might be the poem, i dunno.

if you didn't want criticism, ignore me

[SalemFuchs]

yeah the breaks are just my thing, youre the second person to tell me. but its my style. I just write it how I feel, not with intention to be a masterpiece. I just thought Id share it with you all.

[Shadowhawk]

it's quite good, I find the breaks apropo considering the subject...  it's a bit creepy for me in that it mirrors some things I have thought or felt at times, which is for me another reason to like it...

[Diego]

...all of that sounds familiar! erk. the writing style and presentation is also kewl and very pertinent.

D xx